I’m participating in Weekend Writing Warriors, sharing a snippet from the opening of my YA mystical fantasy-in-progress, The Unicornologist:
“You’ve got to give Kate a chance.”
Hillary crossed her arms. “I wish you never married her. We were just fine, the two of us alone. I don’t need a new mother.”
“She’s not trying to take Mom’s place. No one expects Kate to replace Mom in your heart, Hillary. But I love her and she’s my wife. I expect you to treat her with courtesy.”
Hillary blew a raspberry in disgust.
I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 1? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please leave your comments below.