A Snippet of The Unicornologist, Chapter 4

A Snippet of The Unicornologist, Chapter 4

It’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-10-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.

Today’s excerpt happens the day after the events of Chapter 2. Hillary is having trouble paying attention in algebra class.

Hillary looked at the blackboard. The equation made no sense to her at all.

“Just follow the steps you wrote down. You did write them down, right? You’ve been scribbling away.” Mr. Belluchi was at her seat in two long strides. Too late, Hillary tried to cover her notebook with her hands.

Unicorns? You’ve spent this entire period drawing unicorns?”

Laughter broke out all around her.

7. The Unicorn in CaptivityI know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 4? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please leave your comments below.


11 responses »

    • She’s actually an A student, even in algebra. It’s very uncharacteristic for her to lose her focus in class. It’s just that, in light of what’s recently happened to her, she’s distracted…


    • Keep visiting ARHtistic License on Sundays for more snippets. Your questions will eventually be answered.


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