A Snippet of The Unicornologist, Chapter 6

A Snippet of The Unicornologist, Chapter 6

It’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-10-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.

In today’s excerpt, Hillary’s reading has been interrupted by her stepmom, Kate (whom Hillary resents), asking for help moving the couch so she can vacuum underneath. Hillary reluctantly complies.

While she waited, Hillary looked around her. Even though the familiar worn couch and chairs still dominated the space, the living room had gradually changed in the six months since her father married Kate. The walls no longer glowed yellow, but were repainted a cool blue to complement art posters from Kate’s old apartment. Funky new lamps took over the end tables. Little by little, traces of Hillary’s own mother had disappeared—furniture rearranged, photographs removed, throw pillows replaced. Her eyes burned, and she could feel tears building.

Kate turned off the vacuum cleaner and set it aside. Hillary grabbed her end of the couch and together they positioned it back against the wall.

“Thanks, Hillary,” her stepmother said.

“You’re welcome.” A sob escaped Hillary, the floodgates suddenly releasing.

…and Hillary bolts for the woods behind their house, her sanctuary.

I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 6? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please leave your comments below.


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