It’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-10-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.
In this chapter, we meet another antagonist.
After a month abroad, Willis Schwartzkopf’s heart filled with joy at his first glimpse of his home across the well-manicured lawn. He’d enjoyed his African adventure, but there was no place like home.
As the taxi driver lugged the last two of the many suitcases up the front steps of the grand house, Willis unlocked the door and retrieved his billfold from his pocket. He paid his fare and tipped the old driver generously. The driver then insisted on bringing the bags into the foyer and setting them at the foot of the stairs. Willis locked the door behind the driver when he left.
Bennett came from the kitchen, a quizzical look on his face. “Sir, we weren’t expecting you until Wednesday.”
“I know, but I accomplished what I wanted to do. Staying longer would just have been anticlimactic.”
I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 8? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please leave your comments below.