A Snippet of The Unicornologist, Chapter 9

A Snippet of The Unicornologist, Chapter 9

It’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-10-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.

We’re leaving Willis’ mansion and we’re back at Hillary’s house.

Hillary misses her mother, who died six years ago. She goes down into the basement to see if she can find some of her mother’s needlepoints. She locates a big box marked “hobbies.”

Inside was a bag of lengths of yarn in muted shades, twisted into shanks by color group. Under that were some finished or partially stitched needlepoint canvases, mostly floral designs. Below those were several needlepoint pillows, and under them, some framed needlepoint landscapes. Hillary remembered these pictures used to hang on the walls, and the pillows decorated the couch. When had her father hidden them down here? It must have been years ago. It was probably too painful for him to see them every day.

Hillary removed each item from the box and studied it. She recalled them in her mother’s hands, the needle moving in and out of the canvases while they watched television together. She could almost smell her mother’s essence trapped in the fibers.

I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 9? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please leave your comments below.

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