It’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-10-sentence snippets from their WIPs on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.
Today’s excerpt comes on the heels of last week’s. Hillary took Robin and Allie deep into the forest to see the unicorn. Robin saw him, but Allie didn’t–and, thinking that Hillary and Robin are pranking her, she storms off in a huff.
While munching cookies (the dessert of their picnic lunch), Robin asks Hillary what she’s learned from her research about unicorns. She reminds him of the Unicorn Tapestries they saw on their field trip to The Cloisters, and she tells him the medieval allegory the tapestries illustrate (actually, in this 10-sentence excerpt, you only get a small portion of the allegory).
“The story is called The Hunt of the Unicorn as an Allegory of the Passion. Do you remember the tapestry with the fountain? It’s called The Unicorn is Found. A stream flows out of the fountain, and the unicorn sticks his horn into the stream. The hunters see this, and instead of catching the unicorn right then, they stop and watch. Other animals are waiting and watching, too.”
“Why? What’s happening?”
“People believed serpents released their venom into streams, and any animal or person who drank it would die. The unicorn purified the water with his horn. That made it safe to drink again,” said Hillary.
This is the tapestry the passage describes:
I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 11? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please leave your comments below.
P.S. If you’d like to read the entire allegory of the unicorn, click here.