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On Saturday, Hillary took her good friends Robin and Allie deep into the woods to see the unicorn (Bob), but Allie couldn’t see him, and is angry because she thinks Hillary and Robin are trying to prank her. Come Monday at school, Allie won’t talk to Hillary, and when Hillary sat down at their usual lunch table, Allie got up and sat elsewhere. Robin tries to comfort Hillary.
“I’d be honored to sit with you, m’lady,” said Robin, setting down his tray.
“Thanks,” mumbled Hillary.
“She’ll come around; you’ve been friends forever.”
“It really hurts, though, being treated like a pariah.”
“You’re not a pariah,” said Robin. “She just feels left out because she didn’t see . . . Bob.”
The sound of Allie’s too-loud laughter turned Hillary around. Apparently some boy was telling a hysterical story. Allie glanced over her shoulder, as if checking to see if Hillary noticed she was having a wonderful time without her.
Hillary stood, scooped up her books, and headed to the library before Robin could talk her out of it.
I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 12? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please leave your comments below.