Another Snippet of The Unicornologist, Chapter Twelve

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Another Snippet of The Unicornologist, Chapter Twelve

It’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.

Coming home from school on the day of the previous snippet, Hillary meets her Dad in the driveway. He’s concerned about asking the neighbors (Allie’s family) if Hillary can stay with them while he and Kate go on their belated honeymoon. But Hillary has other plans for that week…

“Not to worry, Dad. I asked Allie about it on Saturday.”

“Still, I need to clear it with her parents.”

“I’ll take care of it–I’m going over there now to do homework with Allie.”

“Okay, Hilly Billy, thanks.”

Hillary bounded inside the house and up the stairs to dump her stuff in her room. She took one textbook and a pen and her unicornology notebook with her back down the stairs. “I’m going,” she called as she pushed through the back door. Taking to the woods, she turned away from Allie’s house, knowing Allie wouldn’t want her there. Her conscience twinged about the lie she told, but it was the only way she could set her plan in motion.

I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 12? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please leave your comments below.

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