Another Snippet from The Unicornologist, (revised) Chapter 13

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Another Snippet from The Unicornologist, (revised) Chapter 13

It’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.

Beth and Dave are in the State Forest collecting stream water to analyze for pollutants. After they observe the unicorn and other animals in the woods, Beth falls into the stream, and an amused Dave helps her up.

She hoisted her waterlogged handbag and passed it to Dave. Bending over, she plunged her hands into the now-murky water, feeling around to locate the jar and lid. “Got it.” Holding the jar up to the sunlight, she examined the water inside. “Man–lots of dirt swirling around in there. Oh, well; it’ll settle.” She fastened the lid onto the jar. Gripping it tightly, she reached her other hand out to Dave.

And when he took hold of her hand, she pulled him into the water in a fit of spite. “There–not so funny, is it?”

I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 13? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please leave your comments below.

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