It’s time for Weekend Writing Warriors! Every Sunday, a bunch of writers post 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs. There’s a lot of reading, commenting and great writing. Click on the link to see the full list.
This excerpt from Chapter 13 comes soon after last week’s. Dave and Beth recently discovered a unicorn in the forest. Researching unicorns, Dave learned their horns are reputed to purify water. He’s called Beth to propose they go into business together, using the unicorn and its horn to remedy water pollution.
Beth asked, “Sorry–how are we going to catch it?”
“How hard could it be? We rent a horse trailer, and we bring rope and a bridle. We find the unicorn, put the bridle on it, and lead it to the trailer. Nothing to it.”
“I have a feeling it’s not going to be that easy.”
“We’ll bring sugar cubes or carrots, something it would like to eat, to tempt it with. Are you in–equal partners? We could call ourselves Unicorn Enterprises. We could get business cards printed up and everything,” said Dave.
I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 13? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please leave your comments below.
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Sounds like a plan . . . due to get complicated. Nice snippet, Anddrea!
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I think Dave is deluding himself about how easy it’s going to be! How many things can go wrong? Lots, I’m guessing.
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I am with Beth on this one, Andrea! There is definitely more to catching a Unicorn than Dave anticipates. Not to mention the questionable nature of the business!
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Somehow I agree with Dave – catching a unicorn won’t be that easy. Me thinks Beth needs to come up with a back up plan in case those sugar cubes and carrots don’t do the trick. Engaging snippet!
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Dave’s the one who thinks it’s going to be easy.
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At least one of them has their head on straight: “I have a feeling it’s not going to be that easy.” Yup, yup.
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Yeah, I have a feeling a unicorn isn’t exactly a tame beast. This plan is about to go seriously awry!
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Yeah, I don’t think it’s going to be as easy as that. 😉
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Oh, wow, does he know nothing about horses? Assuming unicorns are anything similar, many domesticated horses aren’t even that easy to catch!
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Oh, yes, just sugar cubes and carrots…sure to be all there is to it! A magical idea! I dunno, but I’m thinking…um, they’re going to have some problems.
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