Snippet #24 from The Unicornologist

Snippet #24 from The Unicornologist

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From Chapter 15: It’s the first day of summer vacation (after freshman year), and Hillary and Robin are in the woods, hiking to where the unicorn lives. Robin just griped about not getting to sleep in that morning because of their trek.

“You’ve got all summer for that, and you won’t see me for more than a week.”

“Yeah, isn’t that weird?  It’s our first time being separated for that long,” Robin pointed out.

Hillary let the thought sink in. “Sometimes I feel like I’ve known you forever.”

“I feel the same way. Being an Army brat, I’ve had a lot of practice getting used to new schools, but this time, you made it a lot easier.”

Hillary smiled and lowered her eyes. Does he like me, in a boyfriend kind of way? The prospect of spending the day with Robin just got sweeter.

I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 15? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please leave your comments below.

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