Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #49

Standard
Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #49

Every Sunday, the Weekend Writing Warriors share 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs for others to read and comment on. Join the fun! Click on the link to see the full list.

The Unicornologist ~ High school freshman Hillary Noone, on a field trip to The Cloisters, receives a prophecy: she is destined to save the unicorn. Though she shrugs it off as being preposterous, soon life imitates art, and she finds herself in mortal danger.

Hillary is camping alone in the woods to protect the unicorn. Meanwhile, Dave and Beth, who are trying to capture the unicorn, come up with a plan to get her out of the way.

Dave and Beth hid behind two trees and waited for the girl and the unicorn to pass them. After they were out of hearing range, Dave said, “We’re never going to get it if she’s always with it.”

Beth pulled a tissue out of her pocket and honked her nose. “We’re going to have to be bold and take it away from her. You still have the rope? Let’s catch her first and tie her up. Then we won’t have to fight her off when we grab it.”

Dave smirked, considering Beth’s suggestion. “Brilliant. I’ll carry the rope, you carry the hacksaw.”wewriwa2

I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 24? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.

 

13 responses »

    • This is the first aggressive suggestion Beth has made. Usually, Dave does the escalation. That’s why he’s smirking.

      Like

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s