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From Gabe’s Garage of Goodies (picture book): Gabe has too many power tools, and his efforts to help always end in disaster. Can Mike ditch Gabe without hurting his feelings?
At the end of last week’s barbecue, Mike makes a request:
“Gabe, I was wondering—could I borrow your hedge clippers?” asked Mike.
“Sure–follow me,” invited Gabe, leading the way to the garage.
He raised the door, and Mike couldn’t believe what he saw: the entire garage was lined with shelves, and every shelf was stuffed with boxes, some of which had never been opened. The floor was covered with stacks of boxes and piles of tools. The men could barely squeeze their way among the merchandise.
“This section is the automotive department, and over here is the paint shop, and there are my carpentry supplies, and the lawn-and-garden stuff is right here.” Gabe wedged himself between an electric mower and a gas mower and slithered past a weed chopper before tiptoeing through a maze of rakes, hoes, hole diggers, and weeding claws. “Now, here are the manual hedge clippers,” he said, handing Mike what looked like an enormous pair of scissors, “but I’m sure my electric ones are here someplace.” Gabe rummaged around on the shelves. “I had everything in alphabetical order once,” he confided apologetically.
Please pardon the run-on sentences; I’m trying to keep to the 10-sentence limit. I know it’s short, but what do you think of this small excerpt? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.
Gabe has me intrigued. I want to know what his story is, why he’s the way he is.
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Great snippet. Thanks for sharing with us today! ~Keta~
@ketadiablo
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Haha love how he has different sections in the garage. This is literally my dad; he loves anything that has to do with tools and outside equipment.
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So Gabe’s a hoarder essentially! Interesting excerpt….
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Yep. Gabe’s always got his eyes open for the newest gadget, the biggest, the best…
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Gabe has the wherewithal to acquire, but not the sense to use his acquisitions wisely.
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Alphabetical? That sounds like an odd system.
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Heehee. I can’t decide if he’s disorganized, or if he’s OCD? Maybe both. 😉 Good snippet, Andrea 🙂
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Maybe a little of both. He means well, though.
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Love this description–he sounds like a Virgo or maybe Cancer the crab–LOL.
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That’s a log of stuff – he sounds a bit like a hoarder. 😀 Fun snippet.
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Yup. You can never have too many tools.
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A hardware hoarder! I know a few of those. Handy when you need to borrow something. 🙂
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Oh, Andrea, as a recovering hoarder, I can totally relate to Gabe! What age are you marketing this to?
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I’m targeting ages 6-10.
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An equipment lover’s paradise.
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That’s a disaster. He needs to get rid of some of that stuff and organize what’s left!
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I know a garage that looks just like that, but less well organized.
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Tim the Toolman. LOL You showed us a good look at Gabe. Begs all kinds of questions. Good job.
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Gabe must have every tool. lol Great imagery.
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