Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #61

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Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #61

Every Sunday, the Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday participants share 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs for others to read and comment on. Join the fun! Click on the links to see the full lists.

From Gabe’s Garage of Goodies (picture book): Gabe has too many power tools, and his efforts to help always end in disaster. Can Mike ditch Gabe without hurting his feelings?

Last week, Mike asked Gabe if he could borrow some hedge clippers, and gained entrance to Gabe’s Garage of Goodies…

“Did I ever show you my chainsaw, Mike?”chainsaw

“Yes!” Mike answered as quickly as he could, but he was already too late.

Gabe yanked the pull cord and the chainsaw screamed. “Forget the hedge clippers! Let’s trim back your bushes with this! We’ll be done in no time.”

Mike waved his hands. “No–I’ll do them myself with the clippers.”

Over the roar of the chainsaw, Gabe shouted, “Hey, it’s no problem; what are neighbors for?”

wewriwa2Please pardon the run-on sentences; I’m trying to keep to the 10-sentence limit. I know it’s short, but what do you think of this small excerpt? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.

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