Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #62

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Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #62

Every Sunday, the Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday participants share 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs for others to read and comment on. Join the fun! Click on the links to see the full lists.

From Gabe’s Garage of Goodies (picture book): Gabe has too many power tools, and his efforts to help always end in disaster. Can Mike ditch Gabe without hurting his feelings?

So many readers guessed the outcome of last week’s snippet that I’m skipping ahead to the next day, when Mike returns Gabe’s clippers.hedg-clippers-24249_640

The next afternoon, Mike rang Gabe’s doorbell.

“Hi, Gabe! Thank you for letting me use your clippers.” Mike thrust them into Gabe’s hands. “Have a nice day. I’ve got to get back to, uh, scrubbing the toilets.”

wewriwa2“Hey, wait!” said Gabe before Mike could complete his getaway. “You don’t have to scrub your toilets! Let me show you my new hydro-scrubber. It takes all the drudgery out of…”

I know it’s short (10-sentence limit), but what do you think of this small excerpt? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.

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