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From Gabe’s Garage of Goodies (picture book): Gabe has too many power tools, and his efforts to help always end in disaster. Can Mike ditch Gabe without hurting his feelings?
So many readers guessed the outcome of last week’s snippet that I’m skipping ahead to the next day, when Mike returns Gabe’s clippers.
The next afternoon, Mike rang Gabe’s doorbell.
“Hi, Gabe! Thank you for letting me use your clippers.” Mike thrust them into Gabe’s hands. “Have a nice day. I’ve got to get back to, uh, scrubbing the toilets.”
“Hey, wait!” said Gabe before Mike could complete his getaway. “You don’t have to scrub your toilets! Let me show you my new hydro-scrubber. It takes all the drudgery out of…”
I know it’s short (10-sentence limit), but what do you think of this small excerpt? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.
I’m all for anything that scrubs toilets for me. 🙂
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Oh boy sounds like another disaster is ahead, too funny.
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Really an amusing snippet, this guy Gabe should be selling stuff on late night TV.
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Excellent career for him!
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Of course he just has a hydro-scrubber lying around. Awesome snippet!
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Oh, he has an invention to do ease cleaning. My kind of man!
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Since I work in a hotel and cleaning toilets is part of my job, I would happily hear about hydro-scrubbers!
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What’s the worst that could happen? Run, Mike, run!
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Those women who are so enthusiastically in favor of hydro scrubbers should think again. This guy’s power tools always end in disaster.
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If I were him, I would have mailed the clippers back! Or rang the doorbell and ran!
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Mike definitely thought about it.
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Run, Mike! Run! 😀 Great snippet, Andrea. 🙂
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Is this going to be another disaster? lol
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Mike’s gonna try to ditch him.
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Oh, Mike, you shouldn’t have given him an opening. Next time, thank and run! I can only imagine how a toilet scrubbing could go wrong…
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Is there anything Gabe doesn’t have a gadget for?
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Too bad he doesn’t have an off switch.
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LOL Tim the Toolman. Can’t wait to see what disaster happens next.
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I want in on this toilet scrubber. LOL! Great snippet.
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Really? Yikes!
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