Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #76

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Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #76

Every Sunday, the Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday participants share 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs for others to read and comment on. Join the fun! Click on the links to see the full lists.

Today I’m sharing the opening of the Middle Grades novel I outlined at the writers’ retreat I went on the other weekend. Titled Amanda in Chief, it’s about a girl starting the year at her sixth school in six years. Her strategy for making friends will be running for class president.

As the story opens, Amanda Fanta’s older brother, Jake, drives her to Anderson Elementary, where she will spend sixth grade. Amanda says:

“I don’t know how you can be so happy. It’s your senior year, and you’re starting over again.” wewriwa2

Jake glanced over from the driver’s seat. “Actually, I’m looking forward to it. It’s kind of fun. Nobody knows you, so you can be whoever you want to be. You can put on a new persona. Who do you want to be this year?”

“Someone popular. It sucks to be invisible and have no friends.”

I know it’s short (10-sentence limit), but what do you think of this snippet? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.

18 responses »

  1. Interesting premise. We all experience the need to be accepted at one time or another. Until we finally get the message and realize we can’t please all the people all of the time. We need to show the world who we are, warts and all, not try to shape ourselves into someone else’s idea of what’s currently cool.

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  2. They can indeed be anyone they want to be. My daughter changed her nickname when we moved and she entered a new school. Took me a couple of years before I caught up. LOL

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    • LOL! My sons were the ones in our family who gave themselves new names. My husband never caught on. Kids would call the house asking for Diesel (Andy) or Eugene (Matt) and Greg would say, “You have the wrong number.”

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    • I hate being stuck away from home.
      Amanda’s been invisible at school. That’s why this year she wants to be popular. She knows it’s going to take effort, so she’s aiming high–class president.

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