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Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #55

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Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #55

Every Sunday, the Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday share 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs for others to read and comment on. Join the fun! Click on the links to see the full lists.

This will be my last snippet from The Unicornologist. I’m nearly done with the next-to-last edit. I have no idea what I’ll excerpt next week.

The Unicornologist ~ High school freshman Hillary Noone, on a field trip to The Cloisters, receives a prophecy: she is destined to save the unicorn. Though she shrugs it off as being preposterous, soon life imitates art, and she finds herself in mortal danger.

The day after the conversation in my last snippet, Hillary (who’s been camping in the forest to protect Bob, the unicorn) hears a commotion and finds Dave struggling with the unicorn. She screams for him to stop.

Turning back toward the unicorn, the man thrust out one hand; Bob shifted away from a metallic flash.

He has a knife! “No!” Hillary squeezed between the man and Bob, throwing out her arms to protect the unicorn.

“Get out of my way,” growled the man, brandishing the knife.

Hillary felt her underpants dampen. He’s going to kill me–I should run. Then cold resolve took over, and she stood her ground.

The man pulled his knife hand back, ready to attack. In the next instant, Bob suddenly pushed in front of Hillary, and an explosion went off.

Yeah, I know–I’m a horrible person to cut off there. It’s that pesky 10-sentence maximum. What do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 25? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.

Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #54

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Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #54

Every Sunday, the Weekend Writing Warriors and Snippet Sunday share 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs for others to read and comment on. Join the fun! Click on the links to see the full lists.

The Unicornologist ~ High school freshman Hillary Noone, on a field trip to The Cloisters, receives a prophecy: she is destined to save the unicorn. Though she shrugs it off as being preposterous, soon life imitates art, and she finds herself in mortal danger.

In last week’s snippet, Dave suggested he and Beth kill the unicorn, to make it easier to saw off the desired horn. We pick up with the next sentence:wewriwa2

“How? You don’t have a gun, do you?” asked Beth.

“No, but last week I bought this.” Dave crawled over to his duffle bag and took out a sheath. After hesitating for dramatic effect, he slid a hunting knife from the case and admired its edge.

“You’re going to stab it to death? Do you realize how much force it will take against an animal that size, one with magical powers, no less? You’re not strong enough.”

“No, I can do it–this knife is as sharp as a scalpel.”

Putting her face in her hands, Beth muttered, “You’re insane.”

I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 25? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.

Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #53

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Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #53

Every Sunday, the Weekend Writing Warriors share 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs for others to read and comment on. Join the fun! Click on the link to see the full list.

The Unicornologist ~ High school freshman Hillary Noone, on a field trip to The Cloisters, receives a prophecy: she is destined to save the unicorn. Though she shrugs it off as being preposterous, soon life imitates art, and she finds herself in mortal danger.

In last week’s snippet, Hillary was able to thwart Dave and Beth’s plan to saw off the unicorn’s horn.

Back at their tent, Beth reevaluated their plan. “This is impossible. We’ll never get the horn,” said Beth.

“That’s because we’ve been going about it all wrong. We’ve been trying to cut a horn off a live unicorn,” countered Dave.wewriwa2

“You don’t mean—”

“Yes. We kill the unicorn, then cut off the horn. Easy as pie.”

I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 24? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.

Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #52

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Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #52

Every Sunday, the Weekend Writing Warriors share 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs for others to read and comment on. Join the fun! Click on the link to see the full list.

The Unicornologist ~ High school freshman Hillary Noone, on a field trip to The Cloisters, receives a prophecy: she is destined to save the unicorn. Though she shrugs it off as being preposterous, soon life imitates art, and she finds herself in mortal danger.

Some of you Warriors might not be familiar with the Unicorn Tapestries, which were the inspiration for this book. Click here to see a short video about them.

Today’s snippet is the conclusion of last week’s scene. Hillary, who was tied to a tree, freed herself just in time to find Dave and Beth attempting to cut off the unicorn’s horn. Through her intervention, Bob (the unicorn) has escaped.

Eyes full of hatred, the man strained to get up. “You let it escape!” he yelled at the girl.wewriwa2

“You were hurting him!”

“All we want is the horn.”

“You can’t have it,” retorted Hillary.

“Come on, Dave, let’s get out of here,” said the woman.

“I warned you to stay out of our way. Next time you won’t get off so easy,” he threatened Hillary as he limped away.

What, or you’ll kill me? She trembled at the implication of his words.

I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 24? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.

Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #51

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Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #51

Every Sunday, the Weekend Writing Warriors share 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs for others to read and comment on. Join the fun! Click on the link to see the full list.

The Unicornologist ~ High school freshman Hillary Noone, on a field trip to The Cloisters, receives a prophecy: she is destined to save the unicorn. Though she shrugs it off as being preposterous, soon life imitates art, and she finds herself in mortal danger.

We’re moving forward several hours from the last snippet. Dave and Beth caught Hillary and tied her to a tree so they could capture Bob (the unicorn) without having to fight her off. When Hillary finally extricates herself from her bonds, she hears a commotion and finds them preparing to saw off Bob’s horn (the alicorn).

The man caught Bob in a neck hold and reached for his horn. He let go as soon as he touched it, apparently startled by its pulsation. Then he resolutely grasped it again and nodded to his companion. The woman had a hacksaw and moved it toward the alicorn. She practiced a sawing motion and moved closer still.

“Stop!” shouted Hillary.

“Go ahead! Do it now! Saw it off!” yelled the man.

The woman tried, but with a mighty lurch of his head, Bob deflected her and threw the man into the air.wewriwa2

I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 24? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.

 

Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #50

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Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #50

Every Sunday, the Weekend Writing Warriors share 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs for others to read and comment on. Join the fun! Click on the link to see the full list.

The Unicornologist ~ High school freshman Hillary Noone, on a field trip to The Cloisters, receives a prophecy: she is destined to save the unicorn. Though she shrugs it off as being preposterous, soon life imitates art, and she finds herself in mortal danger.

In last week’s snippet, Beth comes up with an idea to get Hillary out of the way so they can get the unicorn’s horn. Here, Dave reacts to her suggestion.

“I’m so proud of you,” said Dave. “You evaluated the problem and came up with a solution. I knew we’d make a great team.”

“Save your congratulations till we see how this plays out. Up to now, most of our plans haven’t worked so well.”

“You’re always so negative.”

So, are you proud of me or not? Your opinion of me changes from moment to moment. Beth clenched her jaw to keep herself from making a sarcastic remark. Every time she let down her guard, every time her heart reached out to Dave, he’d do or say something stupid, convincing her she was better off without him.

I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 24? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.

Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #49

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Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #49

Every Sunday, the Weekend Writing Warriors share 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs for others to read and comment on. Join the fun! Click on the link to see the full list.

The Unicornologist ~ High school freshman Hillary Noone, on a field trip to The Cloisters, receives a prophecy: she is destined to save the unicorn. Though she shrugs it off as being preposterous, soon life imitates art, and she finds herself in mortal danger.

Hillary is camping alone in the woods to protect the unicorn. Meanwhile, Dave and Beth, who are trying to capture the unicorn, come up with a plan to get her out of the way.

Dave and Beth hid behind two trees and waited for the girl and the unicorn to pass them. After they were out of hearing range, Dave said, “We’re never going to get it if she’s always with it.”

Beth pulled a tissue out of her pocket and honked her nose. “We’re going to have to be bold and take it away from her. You still have the rope? Let’s catch her first and tie her up. Then we won’t have to fight her off when we grab it.”

Dave smirked, considering Beth’s suggestion. “Brilliant. I’ll carry the rope, you carry the hacksaw.”wewriwa2

I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 24? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.

 

Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #48

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Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #48

Every Sunday, the Weekend Writing Warriors share 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs for others to read and comment on. Join the fun! Click on the link to see the full list.

The Unicornologist ~ High school freshman Hillary Noone, on a field trip to The Cloisters, receives a prophecy: she is destined to save the unicorn. Though she shrugs it off as being preposterous, soon life imitates art, and she finds herself in mortal danger.

Hillary’s been camping in the woods by herself, protecting the unicorn. Discouraged by the difficulty of her endeavor, she decides to go home for a day or two.

A deep rumble alerted her the weather was about to change. She shivered and hugged herself as the wind picked up and heavy drops of ice-cold rain pelted her. If that weren’t bad enough, within moments the rain turned to hail the size of walnuts. She ran for cover, finding it under a large tree.

The wind changed direction, and the hail changed to rain again, now coming down in sheets. Water penetrated the spaces between the leaves of the tree, making it as useless to Hillary as a torn umbrella. The roar of the rain sounded like Niagara Falls. Wherever she looked, water swirled angrily, gravity forcing the water to rush downhill.

She slogged forward against the tide, but the water got deeper and deeper until it passed her knees and its power threatened to knock her over. Defeated, she turned away from her homeward direction and allowed the flow to propel her back toward camp.

I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 23? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.

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Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #47

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Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #47

Every Sunday, the Weekend Writing Warriors share 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs for others to read and comment on. Join the fun! Click on the link to see the full list.

The Unicornologist ~ High school freshman Hillary Noone, on a field trip to The Cloisters, receives a prophecy: she is destined to save the unicorn. Though she shrugs it off as being preposterous, soon life imitates art, and she finds herself in mortal danger.

Hillary is camping out in the woods by herself (so she can protect the unicorn), unbeknownst to her parents. While gathering firewood, she hears the secret whistle of her former best friend, Allie, and meets her. (Sorry for the wonky punctuation; trying to adhere to the length guidelines.)

“Hi, let’s go to our tree,” said Hillary.wewriwa2

“Climbing trees is kid stuff.”

“Oh–what’s up?”

“Your parents called and asked for you.”

Hillary gulped air.

“Don’t worry, I covered for you—I remembered they were on their honeymoon and you were supposed to stay with us. I said you were at the library and I didn’t want to go. I asked if they were having fun, and your dad said yes. I told them you were fine and they shouldn’t worry, they should just enjoy their honeymoon.”

“Wow, Allie, thanks.”

I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 23? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.

 

 

Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #46

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Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #46

Every Sunday, the Weekend Writing Warriors share 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs for others to read and comment on. Join the fun! Click on the link to see the full list.

The Unicornologist ~ High school freshman Hillary Noone, on a field trip to The Cloisters, receives a prophecy: she is destined to save the unicorn. Though she shrugs it off as being preposterous, soon life imitates art, and she finds herself in mortal danger.

Hillary is camping in the woods by herself.

A snuffling sound roused Hillary to semi-consciousness. Opening her eyes to pre-dawn gloom, she heard a deep groan. She maneuvered herself onto her hands and knees and peeked out of the tent.

A hulking black shape nosed at the base of a tree by her campsite. Bear, bear, bear!

Hillary crawled out of the far end of the tent and soundlessly rose to her feet. Keeping her eyes on the bear, she backed away.

The bear stood up on its hind legs, sniffed the air, and turned to face Hillary.

Despite her pounding heart, she addressed him with all the assertiveness she could muster. “Bear, I’m not going to bother you, and you’re not going to bother me.”

I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 23? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.