Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #53

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Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet #53

Every Sunday, the Weekend Writing Warriors share 8-10-sentence snippets from their works-in-progress on their blogs for others to read and comment on. Join the fun! Click on the link to see the full list.

The Unicornologist ~ High school freshman Hillary Noone, on a field trip to The Cloisters, receives a prophecy: she is destined to save the unicorn. Though she shrugs it off as being preposterous, soon life imitates art, and she finds herself in mortal danger.

In last week’s snippet, Hillary was able to thwart Dave and Beth’s plan to saw off the unicorn’s horn.

Back at their tent, Beth reevaluated their plan. “This is impossible. We’ll never get the horn,” said Beth.

“That’s because we’ve been going about it all wrong. We’ve been trying to cut a horn off a live unicorn,” countered Dave.wewriwa2

“You don’t mean—”

“Yes. We kill the unicorn, then cut off the horn. Easy as pie.”

I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 24? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.

13 responses »

  1. No! I haven’t read any of the previous excerpts (only just joined this fantastic WWW blog hop) but I hope these two get their just deserts. They must not be allowed to kill a unicorn, don’t they know they’re an endangered species?

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