Snippet #34 of The Unicornologist

Snippet #34 of The Unicornologist

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When we left Dave and Beth last week, they were on the phone discussing the results of their water sample analysis, and how the pesticide level went down to zero after the unicorn put his horn in the water. (Edited from the manuscript to meet sentence limits.)

“You know, we don’t need the whole unicorn,” said Dave. “We just need the horn.”

“You’re not saying—”

“Cutting off the horn is the most efficient way to proceed. It’ll be easy to transport; we won’t need to rent a horse trailer again. We won’t have to find a stable for the unicorn, or feed it, or groom it, or find a vet who has experience caring for unicorns. If we have the horn, we have everything we need for our new business, and we save ourselves a lot of grief and expense.”

Beth said, “I see your point, but I don’t like it. How do you know it will even work if it isn’t attached to the unicorn? Doesn’t it need the unicorn’s power?”

I know it’s short (the limit is ten sentences), but what do you think of this small excerpt from Chapter 19? Any suggestions on how I can make it better? Please comment below.

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